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That mundane essence against my bare skin

Tends to dry ice to dust.

What normally melts

Crumbles slowly like an aging sidewalk,

A heavily used slab of cement,

That screams for its dismantlement.

My name can only command so much,

On the brink of extinction can it no longer

Be used as a device for control.

But baby,

When you speak it,

Let it slide from your tongue like a sin,

But baby,

When you spit it,

Let it corrupt your body unjust,

But baby,

When you see it,

Let it remind you

Of an endless burning bridge of steel,

But baby,

Remember,

When you call my name,

I'm only breathless.
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A bit of inspiration drawn from many different things including a recent breakup from my two best friends.

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i like how you made it very rhythimic and powerful in the end it contrasts nicely with the beggining part
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*EveresshiaWind Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I listen to music when I'm writing poetry so that makes sense that it'd be a bit rhythmic. Thank you very much for the kind comment! I don't receive a lot on my poetry. :)
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