This is just a snippet from my latest chapter. I've changed quite a few things up about my style, and I'm currently revising them all to adjust. I wanted to hear some thoughts, if any, on this particular part. I know it might be a bit confusing since you don't know what's really going on, but it the flow working well? Does it seem like I'm missing something? Keep in mind, please, that this is very near the end of my novel, so it may seem a bit obscure. Would you agree that I should use a bit of obscurity near the end? Or continue very directly?
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