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Sasha II: 1. Triple Stuffing "1... 2... 3!!!", yelled the giant mass of teenagers throwing up their graduation hats into the air. After a seemingly short school year, the senior class that Sasha and Alex were in finally graduated. It hadn't been that far since Sasha and Alex's confrontation that rainy afternoon, but they definitely did not mind due to school being out. This way they could finally get the pressure of school of their back for a little while before it was time for college. Also it allowed them to have fun over their summer, especially knowing that one "activity" that gave them both so much gratification.

"Alex we're finally done with high school! WHOOO!!

The Voice 1

The Voice 1

Many years ago in a place named Chu Nan were differents kind of musics. The people that had the talent to sing or play any instrument go to the kingdom to play for the king, the king always search for the most talented one. But one day the king was taking a walk when he heard the most beautiful voice that he ever heard, he saw a young blue hedgehog singing and playing a golden fluate. The king was amazed to see a unique hedgehog and heard his music, the king wanted that talent and he goes to talk to that hedgehog. The blue hedgehog didn't wanted to leave the forest, he just play music for the nature of the forest, that make t

The Voice 2

The Voice 2

Shadow was looking at the time, soon it will be dark, he was planning on going to see Sonic at night. Shade saw that Shadow was acting weird, "Shadow is everything alright?" asked Shade, "Yes, I'm going to the forest to play my guitar" said Shadow, "At night?" asked Shade, how Shadow would practice at nigth in a forest? "Yeah is more quiet" said Shadow."But what about the Voice and the dragon?" asked Shade, "Don't worry, I wont get in trouble and those are legends" said Shadow, Shade couldn't say no to Shadow, "Ok but don't be late" said Shade "Don't worry" said Shadow as he went to the forest.Shadow look at the sky it was

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Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 7

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 7

Sonic was heading back to the castles but then he found himself with Marcy, "Hi Sonic" said Marcy, "Oh hi Marcy, I haven't seen you in a while" said Sonic, "Yeah well I have been busy and you?" asked Marcy. Sonic was a little nervous, "Oh nothing just at the castle and stuff" said Sonic, "Oh really cause yesterday you weren't around and also I saw something interesting" said Marcy, Sonic realized something and got a little suspicious, "Like what?" asked Sonic, "Well for some reason you were in the beach and a very hairy creature appeared" said Marcy, Sonic was now exposed Marcy already knew he's secret. Sonic

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 5

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 5

Mephiles and Drake were talking about a plan to separate Sonic and Shadow, "So what should we do to separate the Merhog and the Werehog?" asked Drake, "Well it's obvious we have to keep a eye on them, and also watch there every move one kiss can ruin everything" said Mephiles, "How about sabotage?" asked Drake, "Sabotage?" asked Mephiles, "Yes it's a good idea we try to ruin Sonic and Shadow's little date" said Drake, Mephiles though it was a good idea and so he nod.

"Sonic Don't let one little thing get between our friendship, please I....." Shadow didn't know if he should have finished that sentence the

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 4

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 4

In the under water Kingdom, Jules was getting worried Sonic had left last night an didn't return, "Sir we have been searching and he is nowhere to be found" said his guard. Jules was extremely worried now, he then remember, "Bring me Tails the Merfox" command Jules, minuets pass and they brought Tails to the castle, "What's going on?" asked Tails, "Tails you are my sons friend, where is he?" asked Jules, "I don't know, I'm sorry sir, plus I haven't seen him in a while" said Tails. Jules was getting more worried now, his son vanish last night and now he is no where to be found, "Don't worry sir I'll search for

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 9

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 9

Months had pass by, Jules become impatient because he's son wouldn't return Aleena tried her best to calm her king but it was no use, Shade explained the calm about Shadow and Sonic, and so they corroborated by helping protect Sonic, Marcy helped Sonic every mouth and became closer and closer than ever, Shadow learned how to be leader thanks to Shade and then that day came.

Shadow was walking with Shade by the top of the mountain, Shadow looked down he could see the whole forest and beach from top, "Beautiful isn't it?" asked Shade, "It reminds me the first time I came with my dad" said Shadow, "I miss him

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 8

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 8

Sonic was trying to wake Shadow up, "Shadow please wake up!" begged Sonic he quickly got out of Shadow's hands and put himself in a position that made him look like he was kneeling. Sonic was holding Shadow's head in he's chest witch also cover part of he's tummy, "Shadow please!" begged Sonic as he's tears slide down he's cheek. Scourge wen't to Sonic he was about to grab he's arm but Sonic, Sonic grab on to Shadow tight he didn't wanted to leave with them, "NO LEAVE ME ALONE I WANT TO BE WITH SHADOW" said Sonic, "Don't be a fool he's just taking a quick nap" said Scourge he grab Sonic, Sonic pushed him away

The Voice 3

The Voice 3

At night Shadow went to the lake to see Sonic, after Sonic play his flute he was playing with Shadow running around the lake, until Sonic got tired and lay down were there are flowers. Shadow walk to him, "You got tired already?" asked Shadow, "I have never run like this for so long. Is fun and tired" said Sonic smiling, Shadow smile too, Sonic sit and grab a blue flower and smell it, Shadow blush Sonic look so cute doing. Then Sonic pick some flowers of many colors and was making something, Shadow sat down next to him looking what Sonic was doing, "What are you doing?" asked Shadow curious, Sonic giggle, "You'll see" said So

The Voice 4

The Voice 4

After Shadow spend the day with Shade at night he went to Sonic, but he didn't knew that someone was following him. Sonic had finish playing his flute and was on top of a tree eating some apples, then he saw Shadow, "Hi Shadow" said Sonic, Shadow look up and saw him on the tree, "What are you doing up there?" asked Shadow. "Me? I was hungry and decided to eat some apples" Sonic answered Shadow chuckles, Sonic saw like a house hiding between some trees, "Shadow what is that?" asked Sonic pointing at the house, Shadow look to were Sonic was pointing to and saw the house. "It looks like a house" said Shadow, Sonic went down and wa

Sonic Diaries 1Sonic Diaries 1

A promise to forget

In little neighbor hood not too far from the town, there was a house near by a school, we're two kids with the age of 16 were moving in that house, Sonic the hedgehog and Shadow the hedgehog. "Well that's the last of the boxes" said Shadow, "Finally, you know for a house this is pretty big" said Sonic as he sat down on one of the boxes, "Hey Shadow where should I put this?" asked a yellow hedgehog who came inside with 5 boxes with him, "Just put them around, "Hey this is a nice kitchen" everyone knew that voice, the tree entered the kitchen to find a green hedgehog with a black jacket and

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 6

Sonadow: Forbidden Feelings 6

Shadow didn't knew if he should tell Sonic or not, the fireflies were in front of Shadow's face, "What?" asked Shadow, the little fireflies landed on Shadow's hand that was near to Sonic's "You want me to grab he's hand?" asked Shadow, the fireflies made the words "Yes" Shadow didn't look at Sonic he was a little shy, he moved he's hand close and put it on top of Sonic's, Sonic felt something on he's hand he looked to see Shadow's hand was on top of his, Sonic didn't knew what to do now he was blushing a bright red and looked away as well, the fireflies each appear in Shadow and Sonic's face making the figure

Sonadow: StargazeR Love 6Sonadow: StargazeR Love 6

Sonic was sleeping on Shadow's chest fur, Shadow had his arms around Sonic. Sonic have a small smile on his face, Shadow hear his phone and wake up quickly. He pick it up and saw that the Commander was calling, Shadow got up from the bed carefully to not wake up Sonic. He went to the hallway and answer the phone, "Commander, is something important for calling to me this late?" asked Shadow, "Shadow, you betray me" said the Commander. "I didn't betray anyone" said Shadow, "You have that creature in your home" said the Commander, Shadow eyes were widen, "How did he knew?" thought Shadow he don't know what to say

Sonadow: StargazeR Love 5Sonadow: StargazeR Love 5

At the G.U.N base, a soldier entered the Commander's office, "Sir, we found a rare signal that comes from Station Square" said the soldier, "Good job. Check everywhere! I want that thing captured" command the Commander, the soldier nod and got out from the room. The Commander have a smirk on his face, he was seen where the signal come exactly, "So you two are in the same place. I knew it from the beginning that something was wrong" said the Commander.

Shadow and Sonic were at the park, they were running playfully. "Me gonna get you Shadow" said Sonic, "If you can" said Shadow playfully, Sonic giggle. Then

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Airless: excerpt from chapter twenty-one

by *EveresshiaWind, Aug 3, 2012, 6:14:52 AM
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"Why do you love me?"

Days had passed before I found the courage to ask such a bold question. His eyes carved me over as I turned in embarrassment. His cheeks would twist with that crooked grin, and he spoke words, such resonant sounds, I thought I'd never hear.

"The first time I met you--the first time I saw you--I wasn't entirely sure what I thought."

My head bowed as I glanced out a dirty window. "You didn't have an opinion? You didn't have a train of thought?" Overlooking the river, the breaks of the surface due to protruding rocks mesmerized me, but they proved not distracting enough to keep my thoughts off of Ray.

He moved around the room, and folded the blankets we had slept upon for the past couple of days. "I wouldn't say I thought nothing. Have you ever felt as if the air was sucked from your very lungs, and you were dying for breath due to the absence of a loved one?"

My eyes fell to complete my bland expression, knowing the thought of blankness and maybe even a bit of betrayal. Betrayal from who? From that single loved one, or maybe even our creator who I thought little of.

"I know of it."

My eyes remained black.

"It was that same feeling, but," he trailed off. "Occurred backwards."

A bit confused, "You felt as if I sucked the air from you?" I directed.

"Yes."

My estranged expression pushed him further.

"As if I had loved you for a very long time. The void was filled."

Airless: excerpt from chapter twenty-oneby *EveresshiaWind

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This is just a snippet from my latest chapter. I've changed quite a few things up about my style, and I'm currently revising them all to adjust. I wanted to hear some thoughts, if any, on this particular part. I know it might be a bit confusing since you don't know what's really going on, but it the flow working well? Does it seem like I'm missing something? Keep in mind, please, that this is very near the end of my novel, so it may seem a bit obscure. Would you agree that I should use a bit of obscurity near the end? Or continue very directly?

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~ClusterEff Dec 10, 2012

I really like your opening line here. Pulled me right in.

*EveresshiaWind Dec 10, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

I don't share this piece very often since its from a chapter near the end. But thank you for reading and the comment.

Yes, I try to give powerful openings. They don't always work, but I think it has here. Lol

~ClusterEff Dec 10, 2012

definitely

*EveresshiaWind Dec 14, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

Thanks.

*SubjugatedSandwich Sep 5, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

Personally, I think this is spectacular aside from whatever story it may be attached to. It isn't a lot of writing but in what I have read the interaction between the two characters is an intriguing topic and one related in a very engaging way. It exposed unseen depths in both characters that I would very much like to explore.

*EveresshiaWind Sep 6, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

Thank you very much.

(No idea if you read the description,) but this is nearly the end of my first novel, but no where near the end of my story. I'd like to think they have a powerful relationship myself, and like you, I'm still exploring them.

No idea if this will ever hit the shelves one day, but regardless, I thank you again for your encouragement!

It really makes me feel like I'm heading in the right direction instead of running turning around on dead ends.

~VShaw Sep 2, 2012

Do I think it's missing something? Yes! The rest of the novel. I can't help but read this and want to know more. I appreciate your way with words; beautiful, but not too flowery that it is distracting/jarring the pace of the exchange.

I haven't read your other work, and know nothing of your novel, but as a reader, I find it to be a very engaging scene. There's a lot to read into without there being a lot of actual words. Does that make sense? I like that. I get the idea that you've spent a great deal of time working out the mechanics of your work.

I also like the idea of a bit of obscurity - personally, it makes me want to read more. But, I'd have to know more about the novel to have a more valid opinion.

Good work, nice little extract.

*EveresshiaWind Sep 3, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

But if you enjoyed this, I'd love to hear your thoughts on my first chapter.

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Only if you feel like doing so. I never finished revising it. I might, if time is good to me, eventually finish the first chapter just so I can get better advice. If I should really throw it out or not.

But, like I said before, thank you.

*EveresshiaWind Sep 3, 2012 Hobbyist Writer

Wow, thank you very much. This is actually a scene near the end of my first novel. I'm not entirely sure if I care to finish it or not. There seems to be too many complaints for the obscurity in my writing. **shrugs** Your encouraging opinion definitely makes me feel better about it though--as if I had not wasted my time with it in the past.

BIG BIG BIG THANK YOU!

~VShaw Sep 6, 2012

Seriously, I'm a fan of obscurity - I like reading between the lines, trying to work out the motives of the characters. Although, from a writer's standpoint, I guess it can be tricky - I know I can get a bit concerned if I'm being too obscure. Saying that, the opposite is also true and I wonder if I'm being too obvious...

I guess it's a bit of a balancing act sometimes.

You're very welcome. I thought it was a good piece of work, and defo worth continuing with.

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